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You lay out your panels in a very professional manor, and this is very easy to read. If I had one criticism, I'd say it is in the writing. The tone and pacing feels slightly off, like a novice writer or the majority of fanfiction. The blushing rogue and romance in particular felt out of place.
3. How many parts are you planning for this? I hope there will be more than 10 episodes, XD
4. I read your other guids and figured that you are English as second language right? the english you showed here is really gd for an ESL indeed, just curious is that russian guides you were writting?
Oh, at last and most importantly Reynauld is Kleptomaniac!!!! (at least before he payed a visit to the nurse with strips )
Just finish reading it, got few things puped up in my head
1. Why start part 2 a new page? U cant put this in the part 1 if u didnt tell me this link at my profile comments section, I may never find it out ! (and thanks for telling me)
2. wow, this story just got much faster and rated for R, so fast that I dont know if thats a gd thing or not... looks like all the relationships between the characters are developed just in one night which is a bit pushy for me (poor Jori, I never had her killed and never know she was a girl until 2 month later in the game, blame her musk right? XD )